FEEDBACK ON LYRICS AND SONG! Colorblind - Niroshan (LP style)

So I've been producing for a few years now.

I released my free EP (DOWNLOAD!) last year around this time with tracks I've worked on for a few years.

I'm starting to delve into more professional sounding music now with more emphasis on vocals and lyrics.

Check out more of my music at SoundCloud or like my page on Facebook

Trying some more electronic sounds on this track. I wrote the lyrics so far, but it's a very rough cut of what to expect. If you like Linkin Park, I think you'll like my style and friend Martin's music who does the vocals in this so far (Facebook Fan Page).

I would love to get feedback on the sound, lyrics and anything. This is very early into the process, but I think it has a lot of potential. I also made some cover art to accompany the song when I finally release it. 

Basically for the backstory of song is about a girl who broke up with this guy and he feels so misunderstood and she'll always be emotionally colorblind until she lets him explain to her how he really feels, but she'll never know.

Thanks!

 

COLORBLIND - Niroshan (SoundCloud Link)

 

Colorblind (Copyright 2012 Niroshan Amarasiriwardena)

INTRO:
What are we now?
What were we then?
These thoughts consume me
From time to time again

VERSE 1:
All the shit
I've put you through
I can't take it back
But I can prove
That you and I
Were on the right track
Just a little misguided
But we can take it back

All the things
You promised you'd do
I don't need them now
Id rather have you
So forgive the past
Please do it quick
These memories have faded
Don't let them slip

Because...

CHORUS:
You've become colorblind to me
With our fading memories
Turning to black and white
Coming back to me at night

You're just so colorblind to see
Where you're really meant to be
Trying to erase me from your mind
With every little chance in time

VERSE 2:
You said you loved
The way I wasn't jaded
But you leave me here
To become lost and faded
I know I regret
The actions that I took
I know they hurt but
Just take another look

I tried to be there
Whenever you were down
But you left me out
Pushed me to the ground
Though I run back
Each and every night
You say you're done with us
Thinking we weren't right

And now...

CHORUS:
You've become colorblind to me
With these fading memories
Turning to black and white
Coming back to me at night

You're just so colorblind to see
Where you're really meant to be
Trying to erase me from your mind
With every little chance in time

 

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Really nice man.  Sick beats and nice lyrics.

Thanks man, I appreciate it. I'll keep this thread updated with progress!

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