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Permalink Reply by Todraw on October 29, 2010 at 11:44pm

Both songs aren't finished Verses are meant to be rapped. also here on my blog is more stuff from me: http://todraw.wordpress.com/

Rev A Little:
Verse1
whats this
while we're pissed
we just get our head down and keep it low
let them reign with the crown and let em grow
revolution is coming but it is slow
so while the majority's waitin you should know
swing the broken wing to dodge the poisoned sting
some doin nothing some tryin something
and before the snow sinks we're doing the raw thing
a pile of straw is haunting for the vital spark firing
up and grilling the violent shark everbodys barking for this to start
fire those retards let em hear this speech right out the heart
le le le lets this tearin em apart
le le le lets get this to the start

Chorus:
can you feel the shit down here
can you feel the sweat and the fear
can you make the steel dissapear
can you correct the direction i steer

you have no clue....

SHUT UP!!!! SHUT UP!!!!!!!!!

Broken Hope

i hate the calm before the storm
give me this feel of hope so warm
i can feel the cold chasing me
following my footsteps like i am the prey

just waiting till i'm warm again
back up to make me fall again
the higher i get the deeper i fall
and again i'm crawling up the wall

no number to dial no call
might saved me from this fall
its like walkin through a endless hall
i'm shouting hearing the echo of this howl

caged in a maze ready to face
whatever brought me to this place
watchin my hand palm its shaking
and i keep, just keep waiting

getin me mentally armed up
am i up enough to make it drop
to be aible to stop
whatever is about to pop up

pre-chorus(or maybe not or something else)
waiting to get soaked up
once again
the storm is gaining ground
once again
i already can feel the wound
once again
I can hear the terrible sound

Chorus:
life dun wait until u get up(down)
it drags u constantly down(high)
life dun wait until u're fully up(d)
it makes u're face frown(h)
life has got no remorse(d)
get up before u're drown(d/h)

Here we go again in the middle of the storm
all i want is to be me i don want to harm
its tearin me apart and i'm becoming a part
a part of my own friggen messed up heart
i used to hate but now i'm breathing thru it
i wanted to fade but now breathing that shit
the storm just a reflection of my own
so with a glimpse of thought i can make it gone
but that would've been to easy to do so
i struggle once again through you know
it wasn't my decesion to be here no... no
its part a of me and i can't tell it to.. go
i guess i'm cursed so, so am I cursed, no

Copyright belongs to Shikim Beluli aka Todraw

Permalink Reply by Linkin Kid on October 30, 2010 at 2:53am

Violention

My brain full of fights resting only at nights
listening screaming wanted dreaming
cut my part of brain getting so insane
starting to craping me this is not what I wanna be

violention like an operation
violention it´s my new occupation
violention only pain
violention takes it with no gain

discipline doesn´t work nothing seems to work
words that cuts me are words that inspires me
got my part of field where to find my part of shield
starting to crapping me this is not what I wanna be

violention like an operation
violention it´s my new occupation
violention only pain
violention takes it with no gain

violention like an operation
violention it´s my new occupation
violention only pain
violention takes it with no gain

I feed violention that grew in me
feed it through the pain
that comes like rain
not wanna any more
this is so bore
it suck

violention like an operation
violention it´s my new occupation
violention only pain
violention takes it with no gain

Permalink Reply by vivaciousx_xblackwidow on November 3, 2010 at 2:18pm

I'm so below
In my own bad state
You've become a drug
From which I can't escape
INto another place
inTO where i belong
my confidence is gone
and all i can admit
that all i thought was okay
that i said to you was wrong
and all i said
wasn't meant in my own heart
i guess i tore your world apart
so much for the afterglow
there's no chance that the sun will show
and the rain is coming quickly
i have a feeling of the fastest it will only
reach to me
i said everything
as if i needed to
re-ly-on-u
can't take my words away
once i use you to vent on
now that everything is gone
please believe
that my forgiveness
remains strong.
now i know where i belong,
and all i want is for this weight to be off my back.

Permalink Reply by RandomX on November 4, 2010 at 12:22pm

(Verse 1)

I walk out to see whats going down
walk out to see who's wearing that crown
and the frown upon the light in sky
don't deny the truth cuz' without it you reboot
and get in that suit, because

(chorus)

You dont know who you are,
or what is right,
cuz even a dog sees in black and white
can't defy or deny whats out there today,

(verse 2)

Now who you think you are?
you an't spic or span, more like tucan sam.
you fly away from memory of today
forget about our yesterday
your escape, your rebreak
and revoke the way you used to pay cuz

(Repeat chorus)


thats a little something I'm working on right there

Permalink Reply by RandomX on November 4, 2010 at 12:23pm

This is very good, it's not repetitive at all, keep it up:)


vivaciousx_xblackwidow said:

I'm so below
In my own bad state
You've become a drug
From which I can't escape
INto another place
inTO where i belong
my confidence is gone
and all i can admit
that all i thought was okay
that i said to you was wrong
and all i said
wasn't meant in my own heart
i guess i tore your world apart
so much for the afterglow
there's no chance that the sun will show
and the rain is coming quickly
i have a feeling of the fastest it will only
reach to me
i said everything
as if i needed to
re-ly-on-u
can't take my words away
once i use you to vent on
now that everything is gone
please believe
that my forgiveness
remains strong.
now i know where i belong,
and all i want is for this weight to be off my back.

Permalink Reply by Nicholas Day on November 14, 2010 at 4:52pm

this song is called "blink by her" i based the tune and rapping style on "In The End"

When I blink, i can't slow down
try to get up, but im tumbling now
so i can't stop it, i made my move
it hit me like a train, but im not that smooth
she brought it back around, and i can't move
when i try to make her feel
she just wont go


(Chorus )
I tried to show her
make her know
now i go
cuz i won't be shown.


i blink again, and she makes me stop
and she brings me back, so i wont attack
i wanted to forget, i wanted to quit
she wouldn't even stop to tell me what
she thought of me


CHORUS


i wish it would blackout, but every time i see her
i just can't believe her, no matter what she thinks
i feel the same, and im not sure i can take this pain


CHORUS 2x

Permalink Reply by Florian Popp on April 4, 2011 at 6:42am

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B7ZThC7ZSJo&feature=related